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TheLifeinFudan
FudanUniversityisclaimedtopositionthethirdinChina.GivenachancetostudyinFudanasanexchangestudentforonesemester,IcarriedmyluggagewithexcitementandaspiredtohavingafruitfulsemesterinFudan.
ButwhenIreachedthecampus,Iwasshockedbythefirstsightofmyroom.
Theroomissharedbysixstudentswithonlytwotablesandwithoutanyair-conditioningsystem. Thetoiletisunbearablydirty,withfliesandmosquitoes,germsandbacteria.Themostunbelievablethingisthatallstudentsinahostelshareonebathroomandallofushavetowashourclothesbyourselves.What＇smore,thereisnoaesstotheInterandnotanyTVinourdormitory.
Bythen,IrealizedhowfortunateIwasbeingaHongKongstudent.
Insteadofplaining,Iwassimplyconfusedaboutthewaystudentsadapttheirlivestosuchanenvironment. IdoubtmyabilityofadaptationasIamthekindofstudents,whoareeasilysuumbingtoandbeatenbydifficulties.
Butafterlivingwithmyclassmatesafewweeks,IamproudthatIgraduallygetusedtothelifehereandconsiderthepoorenvironmentasachallengetome.Infact,nostudentsinthefacultyareimmunefromthekindoflifehere.Thosewhoareyoungerthanmecanlivehappilyhere,socanI.Theycanconcentrateontheirstudieshere,whycan＇tI?Therearenocleantoilets,nowashingmachinesandnoair-conditioningsystem,butatleastIhaveelectricityandfanstostaycool;Ihavewaterandhandstowashclothes,whichisalreadyenough.
IfIhadlivedinhostelwherewehaveaseparatebathroomforeachroom,Iwouldnothavehadthechancetobuilduprelationshipbetweenstudentsfromdifferentroomsintimesofwashingclothesandtakingshower.Thelifehereisauniqueexperience.
Inaddition,themostpreciouslessonIlearnfromstudentshereistheirattitudesofstudying.Theyaresodevotedandindustriousthattheygetupsoearlyinthemorning,queuingforaseatinthelibraryorstudyinginclassroomtilllateatnight.Studentsaredeterminedtoachievetheirfar-sightedtarget,likecontinuingtheirstudiesaspostgraduates.Besides,thestudentsherepossessknowledgeofdifferentareasinsteadofsimplyfocusingononespecificarea.
Studyingandlivingwiththemisapricelessandinspiringlessontome,asurprisetomethatcausesmetotreasurethethingsIhave,evensomeminorthingswhichItookitfranted.Iamsurethattheingyearwillbeafruitfulone.
简 评
作为一名香港交流学生，梁佳义同学从自己独特的视角看到了我们习以为常的事物。他先是对大陆大学生们的生活条件表示惊诧，然后是困惑，进而逐步适应。先是对复旦学子们的勤奋钦佩不已，进而下定决心努力学习。作者以细致的笔触娓娓讲述了自己的思想历程。
香港基本上是一个双语社会，英语教学比较发达，学生们学习英语具有得天独厚的条件，梁佳义同学就向我们展示了过硬的语言功底。一方面，作者的语言流畅、地道，例如词组如immunefrom，suumbto等的使用就格外引人注目，因为这些地道的搭配和表达方式往往在大陆大学生作文中很难找到。另一方面，作者在文章中表达了自己的真实感受，比如使用shocked来描述自己初到新的生活环境的感受，又接连使用了两个so来表达自己对复旦学子的勤奋学习的无比钦佩，显得坦率而真诚。
当然，段落清晰，结构分明，也是本文的一大优点。可能是出于个人写作风格，作者有点偏爱排比的修辞手段，但对同义词的排比如germsandbacteria，devotedandindustrious等最好适当控制，语言就更上一层楼了。